my everything ended with you
the past spreads, future ebbs away
our meanings now conjoined, renewed
but over like light fades from day
afraid to write these flowing lines
the secrets, spoken, brittle make
fragility clings like the vines
of sadness that my sweetness take
but everything begins anew
the vastness suturing to slake
feelings now reformed, half-true
to numbness that the madness fakes
invades my mind, i laugh & cry
my oaths are broken, look away
civility turns blinded eye
to cover, slightly, shades of grey
I like it man. It delves deep then gets refreshing at the end. I always like reading poetry. There’s a certain sense of longing always associated with it. A little piece of infinity was brought back.
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Really nice … thanks for sharing that.
It sounds like a place we’ve all been and makes old feelings swell within me.
~Darin
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@ALLex, I surely hope English is not your primary language, something was lost in translation and you are not really that much of a douche bag.
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I’m glad to know I’m not the only person that thought @ALLex 's comment was rude and inappropriate… I thought maybe I was missing something…Â
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@ALLex, sometimes its better to keep your negative opinion or review to yourself. Or at least word it with a little more taste and class. You came off as rude, arrogant, and my least favorite, passive aggressive.
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That was not my poem, bright guy. I am just a dude who thought you were being an ass for no reason.
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Oh! I get it!
You feel free to criticize others, but are offended when criticized.
I know LOTS of folks like you. 
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@ALLex if you look you’ll see, Chapman didn’t write the poem. He’s suggesting that your comment was out of line and out of place on this forum. Personally I agree with him. We try to keep things friendly and civilized here. Maybe you can keep your negative reviews to yourself?
Maybe this isn’t the right forum for you?Â
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@moemojo, I was not the one having my writing criticized, I do not mind constructive criticism, but when you are being a dick just to be a dick, yeah, I say something. Calling the persons poetry childish, was pretty uncalled for. I am leaving it at that.
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Ok guys enough is enough… to answer your question @ALLex… YES, this is only a “friendly and good comments” forum. If you don’t like it feel free to leave.Â
I hope you don’t leave, you seem to have interesting things to contribute.Â
This forum has been doing fine without you as long as I’ve been a moderator here, since 2007. You’ve been here less than a month.
After this post I will delete any comments regarding this issue so please stop.
Thank you
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